`text{@dg}`

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`text{Bài sửa của mình dựa trên đoạn văn của bạn, bạn có thể đọc để tham khảo}`

I'm a student so I have to study every day except Sundays. Today is Sunday and I don't have to study so I have lots of free time. I usually spend time with my family and relaxing. Early in the morning, I helped my parents to do the household chores such as sweep the floor. After that, I went out with some of my close friends to play fun games like folk games and motor games. Then we came home together to have lunch and take a nap because we played a lot and we have to energize. In the evening, I had dinner with my family and then we watch TV together, there're a ton of interesting programs on Sunday. We enjoyed it very much. At 7 pm, I did my homework and spent 15 minutes playing video games on my smartphone and reading books to provide some knowledge. It's 9 pm now, and I'm preparing to go to bed after this long day. I'll get up at 5:30 next morning to start a new high-energy week.

On Sundays, I have a lot of free time with my family, so I usually spend time relaxing and spending time with them. First, I help my parents clean the house. Next, I went out with my close friends in the neighborhood. We had a lot of fun, playing folk games and then motor games. At 10 o'clock, I return home. then I have lunch. At 6pm, I have dinner and watch TV with my family. At 7pm, I do my homework and spend 15 minutes playing games on my smartphone, reading a book and then, I go to bed. At 5:30 a.m. I wake up and end a free day of the week. I started going back to school. Hmmmm.

* giải thích :

On sundays có /s/ , bài viết được chia ở thì hiện tại đơn , nên động từ để nguyên ( do chủ ngử là : I )

went→ go ( theo mình chỗ này bạn nên dùng hang out : đi chơi thì hợp lí hơn )

had→have

At ( mình bổ sung thêm do trước giờ phải có giới từ at )

started→start

* Thì hiện tại đơn diễn tả những sự việc lặp đi lặp lại , thói quen hay một sự thật hiển nhiên nào đó