In VietNam, there are many beautiful places such as Nha Trang, Phan Thiet, Vung Tau, Da Lat, and my favourite place in Nha Trang. Today, my family has a vacation to Nha Trang. The weather is nice. The people in Nha Trang is friendly and kind. My Father and I go swimming and go sailing on the beach. My mother and my sister sit under the big umbrella. They talk together. After that, my family has lunch at the seafood restaurant. It is delicious. We come back at 4 'o clock. I like Nha Trang very much because It is beautiful and peaceful. We can enjoy lots of delicious food.

Lỗi sai của bn trog hình còn trên đây là bài mình đã sửa nhé.

1. Bn nên thay cụm từ there are lots of = there are many để câu văn hay hơn.

2. Bn chú ý các khoảng cách giữa từ và các dấu nhé.

     Vd: In VietNam ,there are... ⇒ In VietNam, there are

3. Các từ sau dấu chấm viết hoa, say dấu phẩy ko viết hoa.

4. such as liền sau ko có dấu 2 chấm 

     such as Nha Trang, Phan Thiet,...

5. Có một số lỗi chính tả như luch-> lunch (bữa trưa) bn nhé!

Nếu điểm tối đa là 2 điểm thì bài của bn chỉ được 1,2 điểm đến 1,4 điểm (tương đương 6 đến 7 điểm bn nhé!

Chúc bn hok tốt!

In VietNam, there are lots of beautiful places such as: Nha Trang, Phan Thiet, Vung Tau, Da Lat but my favorite place is Nha Trang. Today, My family has a vacation to Nha Trang. The weather is nice. The people in Nha Trang are friendly and kind. My Father and I go swimming and go sailing on the beach. My mother and my sister sit under the big umbrella. They talk together. After that, My family has lunch at the seafood restaurant. It is delicious. We come back at 4 'o clock. I like Nha Trang very much because It is beautiful and peaceful,We can enjoy lots of delicious food.

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