People say that television has changed the quality of life for ordinary people. First, TV update breaking news regularly in various aspects of life by broadcast around the clock, so (1) the business, education and other fields have chances to change their life. Moreover, financial news help ⇒ helps (2) business-traders ⇒ business traders (3) earn more money to improve their life ⇒ lives (4) by information from news about the stock market, gold price, doing investment ⇒ making an investment / making investments(5), or signing contracts. Furthermore, television can provide us knowledge about storms, floods, mudslides, and how to prevent or solve weather problems by the weather forecast and we can save their life stay away from ruined crop failure. Second, TV is an entertainment device for people from all walks of life. People can range from news to game shows, from music to movies but it is very cheap for everybody. Television helps us have good health of spiritual life, refresh the mind, enrich the soul and it changes the standard of living completely

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2. financial news không đếm được chia động từ theo số ít

3. business traders không cần dấu gạch nối

4. their là tính từ sở hữu của they là số nhiều, danh từ đi cùng nó cũng số nhiều nên lives phù hợp hơn

5. doing investment không phù hợp, nên chuyển động từ thành making an investment hoặc investments