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Lợi ích : it can provide us with information on current domestic and international affairs quickly

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Mình sửa lại hết r nè : 

Nowadays, teenagers spend almost all their time on the Internet instead of going outside with friends or family. Do you think it is very bad for teenagers? So today, id like to tell you about the advantages and disadvantages of the Internet. it can provide important information for study and work or we can exchange with each other. besides, you could be relaxed after a busy day by texting, and watching TV,...Although it is very necessary, we can addicted to the Internet if we use it too much. Next, when we participate in using fake websites, it will steal personal information. In short, using the Internet is not bad, but if you abused it, it will be harmful to our physic and health. we should spend time outdoors with friends and family.